Tada lafil

Odlična priča, nešto slično sam doživio više puta sa svojom tada mladom ženom i bilo je fenomenalno..

Didn't bother to read between the lines or further on did you? WARNING KIND OF SPOILER: Later on they realize how they were acting hippocratic and they change. Tada everything works

because of you, I had the neighbor knock on my wall to tell me to calm down!
Then again, thanks to you, I got to work out my middle finger....Tada!

It's revealed that Bee's home planet has been scouted enough to know that there's a deliberate chemical addiction to males imposed on all females. A 'tada' moment without any foreshadowing. Would it be so hard, in between all the personal drama and temper tantrums of your main characters to write a single scene of them combing the debris field for an intact database or three; something you could hang this future on. But no scene was written because if even a single ship remained- all were either recovering from battle damage or guarding/ transporting those damaged ships- then they could have RECOVERED Thaddeus instead of abandoning him for 20 chapters. Also, Hartwell would know why Bee was so attracted to him. The monthly shots are necessary for un bonded women to stave off death. How do the bonded get their 'boost'? Dare I say, direct from the source? Ladies, normally would I guard my essential bodily fluids, but for the cause- step up to the mic! 2. when villain responsible for possession of Empress mother is 'tada!' Psycho bitch psychic clone who has planted 21 copies to attack Derrick's loved ones from beyond the grave- she and her son will prevail, ha ha ha! Except, then she had to know that her son wasn't dead, so there was no cause for vengeance (see my earlier post). Also, her ego would not allow her to believe that she could fail to kill him personally. Also, husband already arranged death of two and life imprisonment in VA hospital' for a third so why so many bombs left, to target whom? How would she know? KISS. 3. Duke escapes planet 'tada' to collude with insect enemies. Where was the blockade to interdict or track his ship. Were ALL fleet ships withdrawn to counter invasion threat? (must review story line again) No Ranger ships available for this duty? (see prior post). 3. Derrick talks with Nana about contacts with distant members of old Republic. Huh? No prior mention, not even a line: Confidence in the newly restored Empire had a boost in commerce... Then 'tada' 4. Ranger Commander calls and Derrick offers to upgrade Ranger fleet, something that should've been happening all along IF he'd utilizing them properly... say, blockading, scouting Duke's planet and attriting his defenses (see prior post). There are so many times that minions felt need to call Derrick directly in stead of leaving FYI notice with Mary- sudden onset of illness/ injury of said minion
who is now recovering on bio-table so why interrupt Emperor's day directly unless it's 'tada!' to conveniently give MC no time to do the smart thing and utilize his resources more efficiently and make all these cliffhangers and plot twists plausible. Whew! My fingers hour soar form awl this tipping. (see prior posts on editing)
Anon56

The emotions were lacking, which made connection with the character difficult, especially on a sensuous level. Also, this all seemed very rushed, not only to get to the sex, but also to get through it, making me think 'was that it? Plus the ending really did feel like you were pulling a show's over, everybody leave act, in that it rushed about trying to throw loose ends together in a very 'tada' fashion. Just him saying, Oh hey, I'm immortal, doesn't really conclude it, it just quickly throws a lid on it, and says, Stop reading now, with no emotional connection.