Dicyclomine hci

I am really looking forward to seeing how a former slave wrangler at the HCI adjusts to her own slavery. Especially when she does not appear to have a submissive bone in her body.

Storyteller gives an excellent answer to the question: why the heiress placed herself in a vulnerable position. The answer is a familiar theme in literature:hubris. This question bobbs up in the HCI tales by many of the writers who have branched off Joe Doe's Sandy Foot Girl series.

Oh My god. So happy to read this posting. I was overwhelmed with life crap and just escaped for a bit into this BigD/HCI world and its characters. You and the writers that share the symbiosis of this world need to quit wasting time on things like your own lives, loves (other than writing), taxes, travel, (coffee is OK) and write.
I may be a bit selfish in this, but if you were to commit a crimes that put you into prison (with publishing rights) you might be able to focus on my NEED.
The downside of course is as soon as governments or do-gooders realize I have a need it will either be taxed or prohibited.
Come on guys! How about an anthology? I will buy it! Best Wishes.
If I get a response of some kind from anyone, please make sure i know about all of the writers who have built on these stories. Best Wishes.

This chapter took it up a notch. Full marks 5/5. I didn't like the earlier chapter with the fight scenes and the girl getting broken ribs (too violent for me).
Steve is going to have to help with some modern upgrades to the local, small airport. This will revitalize the local economy and make him immune to criticism from local crusaders against slavery. The local Indian casino will benefit from the airport improvements as high rollers from other states can now land their private jets. Maybe a joint deal with SW Shipping will be mutually beneficial.
You have an opportunity to expand into so many different areas, if you choose:
Will Steve buy ML?
Steve could expand into the ponygirl development market, due to the climate in New Mexico.
(check out www.shadowplayers.com in Arizona if you are unfamiliar with them.)
Steve could set up a recruiting station to rescue girls from possible ICE deportation by offering them a green card in exchange for a 2-year voluntary indenture. His business could explode overnight and outpace HCI.
You've got a tiger by the tail if you continue to expand this story. Good Luck.

WHAT THIS IS:
Dear Mr. Bradford:
I’m doing a full Beta Read and comments on Learning Slave Psychology & Paying My Collage Debt. This includes modifying a copy of your text as I see fit, then recording each modification as a detailed comment in this the Endnotes of the Word File.
I will only do an extended Alpha read of your other works.
The process of doing a Beta Read is taking a fair length of time since it is two full edit / reads of the text. This has taken about three months, as it comes after first drafing, then edit of extant first drafts, type up, and just before bed Beta reading of Learning Slave Psychology. So this ‘letter’ and the major comments have had multiple passes. I’m afraid this results in a bit of a jumble in the comments. Please forgive this.
I am doing this in hopes you’ll agree to return the favor of an alpha read on my stuff – before it’s sent someplace and certainly before I post it on Literotica or Amazon. I’ll also offer to do a full beta read on your future work about to be issued to Literotica, or Amazon if not to a regular publisher. To get the full word file with comments and mark up please email me at the address given in the simultaneously submitted personal message.
I am not a copy editor, and you should employ one before sending your book to Amazon or a publisher. If you find a cheap one then do it for Literotica.
As I’m working through your stories I’ve seen possibilities for others that I’ll share with you. Particularly those that are totally dependent on your characters. I’ve had a couple for your world come to me. If our beta reading proves fruitful then we can perhaps talk about a joint authorship on one of the characters I want to see in your world given in Suggested story # 2.
From your writing I see how strong an abolisionist you are, and I’m right beside you. Lady Liberty is key to humanity’s survival.
I work extensively with a Science Fiction & Fantasy author who has kept my nose to the grindstone insisting I ‘show’ everything. I’ve persuaded him to read some of your stuff so not all of MY comments are truly mine, he’s contributed some, mostly on your world building.
He is particularly distressed when you start telling, not showing stories.
This is the MAJOR flaw in your writing.
In Extraordinary Talent you go further summarizing story.
In your preface you, or Jo_Doe write: WARNING: This is a fantasy. In real life, no human being is ever property.
Both I and my SF&F Writer friend are armature historians, and think you have most profoundly understated the case. The fate of those who enslave others makes the fate of those slaves look good.
My SF&F friend is suggested I read Gentler Angles of Our Nature. It has a good précis on what caused the end of slavery. I suggest you and Jo_Doe read it.
Being a writer of future histories he immediately looked at how the situation Joe Doe and you describe could come about. He has suggested I set the second half of the first step leading to the amendment – that is where it is put forth as statute law, shortly after the first half of it from his fiction fails. He’s got that in 2076.
I’ve therefore set my first story ‘connected’ to your work in the first two years of the statutory, not constitutional, law. That is in 2080. I’ve stolen from my friend the SF&F writer the political situation that gives rise to it: the ‘Responsibility Party’ the second follow-on party from the Republikkkan party is about to be massacred at the poles having been handed the worst ‘military defeat’ in US history, causing the loss of over 5,000,000 Americans, or 5% of the population.
The Texas Federation, the eight states that split from Texas in 2042, Responsibility parties, there are eight of them, but they do cooperate, introduces Statutory Servile Indentures as state sex slaves for minor offences with no branding without two violent felonies. The provision for branding of class two and three felonies, but not the most serious Class one felonies – those who are deemed prone to violence, is introduced in the 2081 session of the Texas Federation legislatures, all eight of them.
In dealing with this material he’s given me the problem that his Responsibility Party was intensely focused on 12 – 18-year-olds as the source of society’s problems, with the result that it is not age of majority at 18 but age of consent at 16 that is, at least initially, the minimum age for enslavement. Note that in 2023 I’m hearing rumblings of lowering the age of Majority to Age of Consent, i.e.: 16.
In my story Rangeland State, capitaled in of Abilene, wanted to make the minimum age 12, but was talked out of it, with difficulty by the other members of the federation who saw that would kybosh it at once because it was too like the now Kyboshed Responsibility Act. They did allow persons over the age of 12 to ‘handle’ slaves, provided they had parental consent.
However, the slaves are not sold until 18 and all slaves are held by ‘licensed’ dominators so it is much more of a BDSM experience. I note that in Extraordinary Talent you write like Matt is 17, perhaps 16, and a real hotshot student, when he is enslaved, that’s why he needs a guardian’s signature.
The result is that in my stories some slaves are naked in high school. For some it’s their high school, for most rural high schools their school boards shove the problem off to urban sites sometimes hundreds of miles away. That is long even by ‘fly over state’ standards.
I agree with my SF&F Writer friend that being enslaved is ruination for a member of the heard. It is very bad to extremely bad for a nerd, but not impossible to survive while remaing who you are – which much frustrates the R party.
You show this very well in Learning Slave Psychology. Nerds don’t have a reputation to loose. My friend’s heroes are all nerds, and were never part of the heard. They are also very unlikely to commit the stupid crimes, which is the most common way to be six months as a state sex slave. However, two of them end up Registered Licensed Doms at 16-years-old.
There are two ways to become a Licensed Dom. The first, which is very much consciously written into the law so that the system can self start, is the dom to be registered has to present four slaves willing to testify, under oath as free people, that they have been the Dom’s sex slave for four years. One of the young doms took her first slave boy when she was 12. She was acting under the tutelage of a big sister at the time.
In this she is continuing a tradition of 79 years at the start of her story.
The second requires the prospective dom to spend six days as a full sex slave at a registered dominant’s facility. There are minimums to be met there, no balking at anything, and they go much further than you do is the big one. After six days as a sex slave they become an apprentice dom, working with another, for 800 hours. That usually takes about six months on a part time basis,
Eight Hundred hours works out to 60% of every weekend for six months. The second young dom gets his parents informed consent, after spending 11 hours in his home with his parents and his ‘mistress upon the occasion’. It is only after this humiliation the judge agrees.
I will also note that when he was 14-years-old the judge whipped his boyhood hero’s ass. That worthy’s story my SF&F friend has written into MY stories, as a babe. The boyhood hero surrendered himself to be a sex slave at 32 years, 5’9” and 590 pounds.
My SF&F friend is of the opinion that it’ll take most of 40 years from that point before the ‘Slavery’ amendment passes. When it does it’s the California version that requires all slaves be over 18-years-old.
He asks how deep is the no sales to the public on the statutory indentures is his story notion?
Myself, I’m thinking about what Donald J. Trump would look like as he’s passed through the Big D slave market, likely as a ‘cutter’ or ‘canner’. It took some time to find the ‘bottom five’ of the USDA beef grading chart. Now what makes human on the foot rate each of those levels, and be precise for female and male.

In the process of reading closely your stuff I surmise: you are female, live in the UK, work or worked in the banking industry, and haven’t visited Texas in the Summer. This is locked with your note in Certified Penile Arousal where you say, with my removal of brackets: By age 35, three years before these events, my reputation as a Certified Public Accountant. Abbreviated as CPA—the UK term is Chartered Accountant.
I worked in Houston for 6 years and I praise all the gods and half the demons for Air Conditioning.
I fully endorse your opposition to the world you are building out in your and Jo_Doe’s stories where Slavery has returned for all. It is horror, very subtle horror.
In the real world I don’t expect you to use all of the detail comments, they’re to give you a feel for what I would catch in your future writing. But the major and minor issues should be adjusted in your future writing.
Yours truly,
Slave Paul Petrosky.
MAJOR COMMENTS ON YOUR WRITING:
First major Flaw in your writing starts with Ch: 6) BONDAGE WAITRESS AND SUBMISSIVE AT A BDSM CLUB you start TELLING the story big league NOT SHOWING IT. That’s why so much time passes in so few words.
At it’s worst in Extraordinary Talent you have three paragraphs where you don’t just tell the story you summarize it! The summarization starts at: -Six of the best, whacking my ass with my own belt and leaving red marks and bruises… and end at: -Most humiliating of all was when she acquired a feeldoe—a dildo that fit into her birth… These should have been separate chapters with their own set ups, and not barely a page of story.
This is a very serious flaw in writing. You’re better to skip story segments than tell it. It is beyond bad when you summarize it in the final text.
In writing my first draft Rita Camping, that has split into 3 volumes with new names, I’m showing the Sunday of the ‘Camping’ session that runs 20 hours. I take 197,200 words to do this. This is a good size for Learning Slave Psychology that runs six months. I’m showing everything, and engaging in a lot of mental reflection, since it is first person narrative. I’m seeing some repetition of non-action events.
You story covering six months is only 68,000 words. Yet it takes you 14,000, that is most of a quarter of it, to cover the two days of her enslavement and the Big D slave market. It’s not that it should continue at that pace, but you should be a lot closer to it through much of the story.
I am very much of the opinion that first person narrative is what this sort of story begs for. Like you in Extraordinary Talent, and elsewhere, I do switch view points. That is an ongoing necessity in that form.
A second major flaw of your story is that you don’t have enough African Americans as a population in your story. This supports my notion that you are a Brit.
Given the situation on the ground, even without the 34th amendment, after the 34th I’d expect in the scene where Nikki joins a group of women practicing slave yoga at Big D that of the ten of them five are black, and one or very unlikely two are apparently Latino. More that of the African Americans three are branded, and possibly one of the Latino.
Of the other five women, who are white, or look like it, only one is branded perhaps a second white woman as well.
In this story Nikki notices this and registers it, but does not further process it.
Nikki should also encounter other back American slaves in a variety of circumstances.
I will say that the Americans of color will have indentures 120% – 150% of white Americans, unless they hit a judge like Roy Bean V when they’ll have indentures that are 200% of a similar white person as a minimum.
The third major flaw of your story isn’t a problem in Learning Slave Psychology. Given what we’re seeing vs Roe v. Wade in the Southern US where the girl is indentured for more than a year the ‘Forced Birthers’, calling themselves Right To Life, will insist she become pregnant. Long before the 34th amendment, call it 2032, I expect they’ll require female inmates in prison to become pregnant, the may even offer a 2:1 time discount for the period of pregnancy.
The owner may then ‘sell’ the baby via a state adoption agency. It’s a legitimate adoption, but the adoptive parents pay for the delivery of the child, it’s not quite surrogacy. Many of the younger (under 40) standard or lower graded girls will end up in surrogacy rolls.
Given the level of influence and persistence of the Forced Birther Movement, and how this would play into their wet dreams I’m certain that when a girl is enslaved for more than a year ( usually 15 – 18 months as the minimum) she is to be made pregnant and things like the pill, IUDs and implanted etonogestrol rods are actively removed.
How to hide them becomes a cult activity, as it may be even without a slavery amendment like your 34th.
Again there are issues, so if the girl is too young (and 16 will be old enough and in the early versions listed, until the 15 Justices of the Supreme Court, curtsy of the 32nd Amendment of 2028 according to my SF&F friend who’s world I’m also poking into, make it 18-years-old or else) or has other medical conditions.
In my fiction a 14-year-old who’s had not just an abortion (20 years for murder 2) but a hysterectomy (5 to 10 years for illegal birth-control) in 2079 was put in a MEN’S prision because she’s no longer a woman or girl. She comes into a story as the slave of the male young dom when the Supreme Court drops it to involuntary manslaughter & kyboshes the illegal birth control conviction.
There will also be a long list of conditions where a slave pregnancy can be terminated, unlike what’s happening now (as in Idaho) because if not then there’ll be no Slave Vets.
As it is by 2023 July 4 Idaho will have lost 40% of OBGYNs and a thick slice of its MDs of all types in just a few months. It’ll be 70% of all doctors by the 2024 election, and THAT should be an election issue in 2024.
Fourth major flaw in your writing / world building is your wimpy collar. Even today a slave collar manufactured for a Department Of Justice would report the slaves location by GPS every 15 minutes via a cell connection. I’m unsure of how many other bio-functions it could report without implants, but body temperature, heart rate, sweat salinity, sweat rate and probably blood oxygen level are certain. With implants be sure that blood sugar would be reported hourly since that implant is currently extant. The presence of cameras for a variety of uses will be there.
I’m not sure how the cameras report to the Justice Department or the County Court, that depends on available bandwidth on the cell system or they have to come in and be downloaded by ‘induction’ or blue tooth link, what ever they use to connect your cell phone to the billing network at the store.
Note: my collars are good to 200 meters of seawater and are induction charged, and perhaps camera data is downloaded by ‘induction’ or blue toothed to an ‘outer collar’. In my fiction slaves can trigger permanent recording by their cameras by pushing a button on the collar near the right one. The button is a dimple forward of the right hand camera.
My colars and their implants for sure report hourly the fertility state of the slave, both male and female.
I’m even more unsure about what the legal implications of a camera being blacked out are. They are almost always serious. This is important to my story for a variety of reasons, but Car Dunker does nothing illegal, even as she has her actual age temporarily inked on her ass. I believe later such an action is grounds for a criminal complaint against whoever did so. Those cameras are to guarantee whatever civil rights the slave does have.
The Fifth major flaw in your writing / world building is that there will be abolitionists, a number of churches are abolitionist and will remain so. Also those in peril of enslavement because of debt will flee the country, and that’ll make international issues with it. There will also be those attracted to being indentured as sex slaves coming into the country, and there are both foreign and domestic issues with that.
The big issue in the abolitionists quiver is the fact that slaves do not purchase anything and drive down the price of labor. That makes things get ugly.
The Sixth major flaw in your writing, the monetary amounts seem like 2015 or so, and getting past the 27th amendment will take a while so I’m writing at the beginning of the first step there. Perhaps the second but it isn’t obviously connected, having a society decide that its most productive members are a threat to its existence peace and stability – MOST OF ALL ITS STABILITY.
There are people looking for a Chinese Turn like 1433 who insist that persons who do not conform by moulding themselves into the heard must be purged from society all together. This gives a fertile ground in which when that approach fails the enslavement of nerds, which is what is intended, appears as needful.
Problem rapidly becomes it’s mostly Herd Alphas, not nerds, that end up in a collar. This is driven by Herd Alphas wanting to be adult, while nerds aren’t sure growing up is a good idea in the first place.
So you should think of this as Science Fiction (Social) and tweak just a few things.
I’m using a factor of 20 on prices in 2080 which is a little less than my SF&F friend would, he uses that in 2076 and they’re in the tail end of a famine
The Seventh Major Flaw in your world building is that you’re not showing Texas as hot and sticky enough. You’re sensitive about peeing and being able to pee ‘appropriately’. This is a big reason to suspect you are British. I don’t expect naked slaves to care where they pee, so long as they’re not going to be in it very long.
In Texas, dehydration is a life critical threat. I will attach a segment where my major hero Vollie comes in after working outdoors and not getting watered for four hours. He is dangerously dehydrated, as are the others. They make up a special ‘water’ with 2 tsp salt, 1 tsp baking soda and 3 Tbsp sugar to drink, at two liters per person.
It is consumed, in under a minute by those who can chug. Vollie, who can’t chug yet, takes less than three. This level of drinking, and the reaction to the salt, making the water taste good, indicates a ‘concerning’ to ‘hazardous’ level of dehydration. It is possible to become dangerously or life threateningly dehydrated, extremely easily, in East Texas.
I’m writing East Texas, not Dallas where I’m sure it is lethal. So you need to work on issues of dehydration in your slaves. This is of concern at all times, even in December January, though not nearly so often.
Note: this is as of 2023, and has been since before either of us was born.
The eight major flaw in your world building is that the slaves walk barefoot across the parking lot to the Auction House. In Texas in the summer the asphalt pavement will burn their feet, even if they’ve trained for it. Then there are issues with rough surfaces. Most folks, including the two in breeding the Pony Girl wear boots that leave the sole of the foot extremely soft.
About the only thing slave sale centers can do is have bins of size 12 flip-flops at both the entrance to the parking lot and the exit of the building so that naked slaves don’t arrive bleeding from the foot.
There are also problems with the abolitionists. They’ll spread broken glass around the approaches to the building’s entrances. It’s not a problem when they arrive by poodle transport, but when they’re walked in from court or the parking lot it could greatly diminish their value as slaves.
The ninth major flaw in your writing, not world building – you’re just not going there, comes in that I disagree with your writing choice. Your slaves will be expected to be Piss Sluts for sure. I’m not sure if they’ll end up getting fully toilet trained. However, that is a major jump in BDSM intensity and a lot of writers don’t do it.
The tenth writing flaw in your text is a bunch of things. Most noteable is your excessive use of ‘AND’. It is very excessive. I’m working on minimizingit to an excrutiating degree. It is followed by ‘But’, and ‘That’.
It is nickel words that inflate your word count, without advancing the story that need to be minimized and systematicall removed.
I’m not sure if I’m right, but I strongly dislike having speech as the second part of a paragraph. I almost always put it first, that’s 99.9% of the time. I’ll put a red word to mark no new paragraph and then start the next paragraph with the first word of speech in green. Partcularly when you start with an ‘And’ or a ‘But’. I’ll cut the ‘and’ capitalizing the next word when I remove an ‘and’ at the start of a sentence, greening only the capital letter. I may or may not split the sentences. Where I move something to behind the speech I color that text pink.
Much of your writing, most of the writing in this gendra n fact, is ‘action scene’, so short sentences and short paragraphs are the rule. I’m splitting up your paragraphs, not as much as others but I’m often cutting out two or three paragraphs per paragraph in the original text. When I do so you get the first word in the new paragraph in green.
MINOR FLAWS IN STORY, IF NOT OVERALL WRITING:
The first of these is a general lack of Slave Males in the story. In fact in the entirety of your writing.
I feel this as is an ongoing issue.
I’m not sure about Big D, who should have it with prime, choice and select, beefcake* as well as labor slaves, you get to define what Prime Beefcake is, but elsewhere your various female slaves should encounter a number of male slaves through the story. *I have found the USDA Beef grading documents.
My expectation is that a much larger fraction, that’s about 2/3rds – 7/8ths, of the criminal slaves should be male. Now how many of them would be rated prime slut boi I’m not sure. Far fewer than with females I expect.
I note that criminal slaves are branded, you put it on the ass. My BDSM doms put the great house brand, like Big D’s or State of Texas, under the right arm, while private owners do so under the left arm.
I ran a check of the criminal slaves going through Big D. With 5 million in the greater Dallas area, and Texas’ 2023 typical 1% incarceration rate, and a 50 year life span from 20 – 70, that works out to about four criminals per weekday. Thus big D will tend to a Monday to Friday operation with minimal staff on weekends. I also expect that ‘violent criminals’ will NOT be put into servitude but be kept in high security facilities like Huntsville.
The underarm area keeps the brand clear of the area that’ll be whipped. I’ve taken this right-left thing a fair way in the stories, I’m not believing it but my characters are following it, and the God of Chastity Devices, that they swear by, to and at. You may have yours swear by it too.
You do not mention the tattooing of slaves. That is more visible than a brand on a white person, Branding will be more prominent on a darker skin.
You do allow your slaves to wear clothes, as in Adjusting My Attitude, Extraordinary Talent and in the later chapters of this story as well. In the earlier iteration that is verboten.
I will say that you have two men with the group of slaves being taught slave yoga that disappear from the story, at once. That is far, far too few, there should be 15 – 20 branded men in the slave yoga classes at Big D. There will also be half that who are debtors, so unbranded.
The second minor flaw in your story, and it is an active choice many literotica writers make, is the slaves are not being fully toilet trained, nor even just made into pee sluts. Given the situation you’ve set up, then full toilet training, especially for prime long term sluts is inevitable.
The third minor flaw is that you don’t have Big D and others using Pink Pills on the girls, or Cealis on the boys. I’m not sure if Judge Roy Bean V does, but I wouldn’t put it past him.
I also believe that the number of people who can’t use them is relatively tiny. The slave wranglers know to ask if the slave has taken nitrates for heart conditions, and that will be part of the standard spiel.
These will help make even cutter Judge Roy Bean V do better on the sex score.
In my fiction they are still using Cealis, but their pink pills are about 10 times as powerful to those currently available.
It’s a forth flaw that I missed until 2023 Jy 18 the fist sailing day of my year.
My sailing companion commented that he felt more naked in a board short and tee shirt than he did while sun bathing nude in the park in Munich Germany. It is the difference between nude and naked.
The issue is the Drivers License, the credit cards, the ID, the money and the power it brings, and all the other stuff that is carried. Nerds find being naked mostly liberating, but, and it is a very big BUT they lack pockets for their stuff!
With younger folk in 2023 the issue will be the loss of I-phone and internet connectivity. That loss will be shattering to many of them.
It isn’t an issue in Learning Slave Psychology but should be. You do comment on how Elizabeth’s ‘boogie bag stuff’ is handled in How I Paid My Collage Loans. The boogie bag holds the mortgage, the old job references and other critical documents that a ‘short term’ slave will need preserved somehow. Those going in for long term or perminant that will be a mater for the court and the ‘prison / slave’ system to deal with.
I’m going to have to work on this issue in my fiction. One question from this is: do slaves drive?
This is a critical issue for any deeply rural owners. Ranch slaves need to drive legally, so there has to be a way to convey their drivers license somehow. Mind those busted for Drunk Driving lose it anyway. That’s how a number of my characters end up with relatively short indentures of six to 24 months.
My SF&F Buddy had a room mate 30 years ago who drove 90 minutes to get to a dance, and almost as much to get to town. Yes that was Alberta, but the distances in West Texas will be the same, or longer.
It will also include student cards, passports – both US and foreign, and other ID and credit cards.
The loss of these symbols of identity and power are a key issue in becoming a slave.
On a personal note for you from my friend’s SF story where his ninth graders have ‘First Draft’ as their ninth grade English class. In the first lesson the teacher explains that this lesson is ‘not to be discussed with your parents’ ever. The teacher then tells the students when you writing you are:
NAKED TO THE SOUL, ALL THE TIME.
Which is why I make the surmises about you that I do.
WORLD BUILDING ISSUES
The economic impact of slavery becomes very important as the size of the slave population grows. Rome was 35% slave and perhaps half or more foreign born. Dixi pre-1863 was getting close to half in the more slave populous areas.
In 2020 Texas incarcerated about 1% of their population over the course of their lifetime. So I presume that the level of enslavement is most of 1% with brands on their asses. There will remain a population that cannot be indentured. These maniacs have to be incarcerated because they, or those associated with them, are extremely violent.
You imply that ONLY women are given slave yoga in school so the men you do show practicing should be doing poorly since many of them never practiced before.
Running only greater Dallas with a population of five million, at 1% of population branded and enslaved for some time during their lives you’re looking at about 4 slaves a business day if that’s over 50 years.
That’s not right, or 20 slaves if it’s over 10 years. Of the 20 four will be female, three of them black, and 12 of the sixteen males will be black. I have no idea how many will be in for debt, hence unbranded, but they will be in like proportions to the criminals, only majority white with less than 10% black because of red-lining that denies credit to African Americans.
I believe you’ve got a story about a voluntary slave who does that to hide from the gang, but I haven’t taken, nor read, it yet. I also have a scene on camera two where people ‘taking back their own’ raid a brothel, she’s not there, which is why she’s still alive at the end of the scene. Twenty-five or thirty other people aren’t.
I’m much less sure of the debt issue, even if it is wonderful for writing purposes. I’d expect that like Elizabeth a fair number of college grads do end up in default. Still I’d expect that to be about 1% again. The number of ‘volunteer’ slaves is essentially negligible, but they do make fascinating writing subjects, and excellent heroes.
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I think you’ve partly lost it at Big D. About half the slaves going through the chutes are in a state of abject terror. They’ll pee. More the other half, even the males, especially if they’ve been well dosed with Calais or are on a ‘heavy pink pill’ that we don’t have quite yet, will be leaking girl or boy juice at a fairly high rate. The result is that there will be a serious pong in the chutes.
I’m not sure how often they’ll be hosed down, but not daily, perhaps Saturday night with no sales Sunday. The pong is itself stimulating, to either erotic or terror.
This is the result of several weeks of thinking about Learning Slave Psychology. It won’t only be a problem at Big D. All the slave markets will have it in the approaches to their sales arena.
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There is also the question of ‘older’ slaves, ones with significant skills, e.g.: Master Tool & Die Maker, I have one of those in Change of Lives novels. I’d like to see how you have the older people come to be enslaved. Medical debt becomes relevant since 35% of all US Bankruptcies are from ‘medical debt’.
I’m writing two stories where there are a number of ‘senior slaves’ with serious professional chops. The Change of Lives novels are how I tie my stories to yours, but unless I say so I don’t expect anyone to notice. The two novels are: Car Dunker, and 1950Lion are currently in rev. 0, that’s hand-script.
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One of the issues with this that you haven’t discussed is what the auctioneer’s book for the merchandize says. At some point, you’ll need to write one up. I’ve got a real good character for that, two actually, but I’m holding them for now.
I will tell you the individual ‘product page’ has six boxes. One of them discusses skills and credntials the slave had, like Tool & Die Maker, or carpenter. The last one, number six, is filled in by the slave to be sold, and that may be the first or second time, saying what they think their prospective owner needs to hear, if anything. Or what they said in court when sentenced.
The other issue you haven’t, so far as I’ve read, touched is slaves with ‘medical issues’ from diabetes to psychological drug requirements like anti-depressants, which from a prospective owner’s POV can be very critical since they indicate the danger of murder-suicide by a slave?
So do Medic Alert Bracelets get past stripping slaves ‘slave naked’, or are there special ones that are part of the collar?
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There is also the dicey question of can slaves give evidence in court. Is that part of surrendering all their civil rights? You suggest they can not. I’d like to see the rational behind that, even more the extent to which it is applied, particularly where a slave is a pure witness, not affected by the crime.
Car Dunker in Change of Lives will have to put the three boys who are headed to Prison as violent criminals because of ‘strong’ Class One Felonies – Insensate Rape, four counts, Assault and forcing someone to commit a crime, specifically rape, two counts, as well as three counts of three class two felonies.
In my fiction only non-violent criminals get to the courthouse lawn with its fire pit / Incinerator where they burn their clothing, get dry shaved, and are collared with a much more capable collar.
They are vaccinated and tell tailed ‘for everything’ the following day by a vet. That’s eight loads in the arms and ass, followed by thirty plus devices in the pectorals and around the neck. They’re the same ‘tell tails’ old folks get in their arms, but these have longer tails so they can signal & charge by induction with the collar.
The three boys Car Dunker and her two friends testifies against each have four rape convictions which she can’t speak to. She and her friends did not witnessed them, netting 80 years in Huntsville each and a variety of assault charges. In addition to the four counts of rape the perps face three counts of attempted rape, thats Car Dunker and her two friends, including one against a now, but not then, slave. They also served 60% alcohol to minors with the intent to rape them too.
The judge sentences the three boys to one day, 24 hours, of sexual slavery for the attempted rape of, reckless endangerment of, and giving alcohol to, minors. The girls get to do an ‘atonement’ session, which I am stealing from you. The girls do it under the direction of Car Dunker’s young female Dom’s mother, who is herself a dominatrix of 30 years standing.
Car Dunker and her friends were still conscious when they left the bush party. The other six girls weren’t. All six of them now are now mothers. In my fiction by 2080 the Forced Birthers don’t allow rape as a reason to terminate a pregnancy.
It has been a little over a year since those rapes, part of that is the court docket, much of it delay by the three boys. They are the son of the local Responsibility party president, The RP is the second successor of the Republikkkan party. The son of the county President of Right to Life Association, and the sone of either one of the area State Representatives or the Pastor of the largest church in three counties. If you’ve a preference between the state rep and the pastor’s son let me know, this scene is yet to be written.
With the indictments of Mr. Trump the question of do persons indentured either voluntarily or for debt get to vote raises its ugly head. Is that a civil right or no. I do not expect it of those guilty of a felony, but misdemeanor crimes might even if they are enslaved for it. Note the Romans had a fairly elaborate set of slave rights, however limited it was.
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There is also the central issue of the south prior to the Civil War 1860 – 1865, that slaves lower the price of labor and DO NOT CONTRIBUTE to the economy since they have no money to buy anything. More if they get any money, it is saved to allow them to ‘buy themselves out’.
Thirty years on this will be a political issue you will have to deal with, since I’m working the first two years of it in Change of Lives it hasn’t had time to be worked out. I do take it that previously abolitionist churches remain so.
I have asked some of my American friends which sects are anti-vaxers and anti-implanters. I am taking anti-vax as indicative of being anti-implanting. Please make any suggestions you may have.
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I was at a party Saturday and one of the girls there is a celiac. This raises the question of what, if anything is done about persons with food allergies. Lets face it CSI had a condemned man eat a peanut butter sandwich and die hours before his execution. Depending on seriousness it will represent a serious degradation in performance.
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You write kibble, but it will need to be Human Kibble because Purina and other dog food manufactures will formulate a ‘kibble’ for humans. I will have the initial Slave Kibble is manufactured by Purity Foods Ltd. Of St. John’s, Nfld., who make products close to it and have since the age of sail.
It will likely NOT contain peanuts or any other nut ingredient. They don’t want to loose the money to pay for a dead slave.
Since you are NOT the only author to do this I’ve checked on nutritional balances. Dog Kibble is short on Vitamin C, having none, since dogs make their own and it is long on Vitamin K3 that dogs need many times more of than humans. The short leads to Scurvy and the long to Vitamin K toxemia since it’s a fat-soluble Vitamin.
As said, Purina will put out ‘Slave Kibble’ about five years after there are four states or the Texas & California Federations with ‘Slave Acts’ even if the amendment is 40 years in the future. The Newfoundland firm makes food very close to it already as ship’s biscuit.
In TRYING ON A COLLAR you make the point that is Human Kibble
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Issues with Slave Grading:
The big one is who pays. Now for slaves being sold that’s the buyer, but for those being graded for other reasons, be it getting a bank loan or as a rite of passage, there will be a charge of several hundred dollars for the non-overnight ones, perhaps a thousand for the overnight ones based on 2015 prices or 20 times that for 2080 prices.
The not very big issue, it probably doesn’t show well, is one of the groups of gawkers at Slave Grading will be tourists. They’ll pay well for the privilege. Part of what they ‘pay’ is comment on the slaves on offer so the tourists have to wear a microphone and recorder to capture their comments on the merchandise being graded.
I expect they’ll also want seats in the peanut gallery, where they can’t bid, during the auction. They continue to wear the mike & recorder so their comments during the sale will be known. This will be a mixed bag but sometimes insightful. I will be using these in one of the redacted stories.
You do show in LSP the to be sold interacting with the slave wranglers. How many other slaves do floor routines at Big D. It will be something Big D looks for, and tries to promote in their merchandise. This is a big part of one of my redacted characters actions.
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I don’t see you showing a major buyer of non-violent slaves of the Standard and lower grades of slave that I am writing into my series early on. That is the fast food industry. Most of which will be staffed by naked, or nearly naked slaves. They’ll have an apron to keep the hot fat from them and maybe steel toed boots.
Being in the fast food industry brings the naked Slave’s Ultimate Nightmare. A confrontation with a seriously underage person, think 12-year-old, who wants to handle them, worst possible luck is a precocious pugnacious 12-year-old of the opposite sex who wants to spank them, ideally over their knee. That is the ultimate in slave handling. It is hard to understand that it probably is not sex for a really young kid.
Note I’m writing five years after a major famine brought on by a 177 detonation nuclear exchange so my kids are all in the bottom 30% of average size for age. Thus the 12-year-old in Car Dunker’s story isn’t up to 100 pounds yet, so sex doesn’t exist for him, but spanking an adult has all kinds of power attractions.
I look forward to reading your description of this situation and how it is finessed.
As the first slave since 1863, Car Dunker does this two or three months into her time as a sex slave face a person more than 762 days younger than her. She is legally the day before her 18th birthday her entire 18-month indenture, so she doesn’t have to worry about people older than her, but they do have to not photograph her.
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Note her collar has four cameras so they will be by her, but those cameras don’t see much if any of her.
That is someone who certainly can NOT have sex with a person more than 762 days older than them. That day count is two years two days, provided neither year is Leap. The sex in question is a bare handed spanking causing Car Dunker to have an orgasm.
I see a compromise, and her owner takes it to her uncle the Judge who rules in favor of that compromise. It is one his father used with his grand mother to avoid incest, and that at the ripe old age of 14-years-old the judge used on one of his heroes who’d given himself into servitude for life before the act by 56 years.
Or do the big chains like McDonnalds, Burger King et. al. simply say, No Slaves On The Premises? I can sure see that.
In GOING AROUND TO CUM AROUND Jacky contemplates murder suicide of her ex-boyfriend. She understands why the government is hard on slaves doing so. Any slave holding society’s greatest fear is Servile Revolt and the Bloody Red Flag it fly’s are well established traditions.
The question I will ask you is are statistics of such occurrences recorded separately. Are slave suicides recorded on a regular basis. The roman’s lost 1 – 3 % of their slaves to suicide a year. If a record is kept is it public or not? Given the abolitionist churches likely it will NOT be public or at least not published without a certain amount of hacking by somebody.
That leads to the questions of abolitionists in your fiction the reinstitution of slavery in mine, at during the first story and second story isn’t 18 months from that it’s too soon for them to have developed a lot of traction, or even know who they are – Note Well the Doms in my fiction HATE the Slave Act.
General Question, how many slaves are subject to gender re-identification?
I’d expect those charged with sexual assault to be ‘on the needle’ so that they begin to appreciate ‘grab him by the pussy’, or turn-about is fair play. This would be in addition to branding and tattooing.
I do have a conviction for Sexual Assault in my fiction, but with enough mitigating circumstances he’s given a life time indenture, not 40 years in Huntsville, unlike the three guys who ‘insisted’ he do it or lose his boy bits. They get 80 years in Huntsville, and the first day as indentured slaves, so they can do your atonement, that I think a great idea as shown in Circle Star Slave. My life time indenture gets the Triangle Star of Trinity State, one of eight states Texas breaks into in 2041. Georgia throws the ten counties around Atlanta out in 2032. I have outlines of all eight Texas Federation Slave Brands.
I class it as a minor error in your writing, but there is a serious lack of any consideration of what and how Nikki eats, and does she, or Elizabeth in How I paid my Collage Debt cook? It is a profoundly common error in fiction, except romance fiction at Harlequin.
Does she get to be a plate called Nyotaimori – for when it’s on a female body. There is no special Japanese word yet for when it’s on a male physique.
Certainly at the BDSM club things like body shots, that’s Drinking booze off a naked portion of a body and Nyota:- should happen.
It seems like Nikki will eat left over whatever while at the BDSM Club, but when she’s at the Rent-a-slut and other places how do they feed her? Equally how she is required to eat what ever she is fed.
My sex slaves, technically free people in your system, eat on their knees, hands behind the back into a tub. This is at a BDSM Ranch. Note in western Texas some ranches are brothels. I’m reading the Pony Slave story.
Car Dunker, in the same English class as 1950 Lion, who’s Dom, gets a huge swimmers breakfast, but her hands are tied behind her back as she eats it. It is in the course of eating them through the year her ‘boy friend’ gets to know her, despite what his church thinks of this whole slavery business. His church have been abolitionists since they started. I’m not there in my writing yet, but I have his defense for church court, and it’s relatively good.
Writing this, and scenes of Nyotaimori and male body food play equivalent which needs a new word, will enrich your writing making it more believable and perhaps more gripping.
One of the issues the State Board of Agriculture & Slaves has to deal with is owners underfeeding or not feeding their slaves. I’m not sure how that gets punished, but I look forward to it in your future fiction. It’s not a problem in my fiction because there’s a blood sugar tell tail in all slaves that advises the court about their blood sugar levels every 15 minutes, so if it’s too low too often the owner gets called on it.
The other issue, that you handle well at the Glory Hole site, is tooth brushing. Slaves have to do it, or at least the long termers, but the short termers, less than three years, might skip it.
In this story you have parts written by Ms. Winters, and they’re excellent and clarifying. I look forward to reading a complete story with a Dominant who loves their subs in the future. Note you should have a POV change line before that part of the story.
One of the issues in your series is there is no solid dating. I understand you don’t want to give the reader a year, but should we agree to a joint writing I’d like to know how many years after the enslavement of Ms. Hollister it is. That event is as good a marker as we’re likely to find.
After all Nikki now has a daughter in Extraordinary Talent, and all of How I Paid off My Collage Loans has transpired. There is also the three years or more that Ms. Hollister was a slave.

GOOD POINTS IN YOUR WRITING:
A key point in your favor is a wonderful POV character, a real heroine, one who is undergoing significant change in her character / soul in Learning Slave Psychology. This is a key point in any good writing. It makes even a difficult story – like what you’ve written, endurable, interesting and sometimes heart pounding. The other heroes, particularly the ones who volunteer to be slaves, are also magnificent.
This is also true in your other stories. Your villains are good enough I’m stopping reading when they betray the hero.
Yes, I’m reading more of your stuff, and I’m finding when you write male slaves your writing rises above your norm, not much but noticeably.
PERSONAL NOTE:
The scene where Nikki does the walk of shame is exceptionally powerful. It strongly echo’s County Racer’s walk in 2080 from the court house holding room to the court house lawn that’s a major park in East City, Texas.
He’s about to give Oath of Submission, the Trinity State Version, of it as he burns all his clothing. That’s an old wool suit of his fathers. He will be ‘scalped’ or have his head dry shaved. There’s an excellent chance he’ll be put over his new owners knee and publically spanked.
What he is stunned by is that his new owner tells him he doesn’t deserve the spanking he is about to get. He hasn’t EARNED it. He’s puzzled why a slave would want a spanking.
He hasn’t yet had issues with having a spike up his penus that prevents both cumming and peeing, which is only allowed after a spanking or act of utmost humility – and he’s farther away on those.
Almost as shocking is how very disappointed she is that he hasn’t cum during it. He is thus rendered a Beige Slave. Mistress Adamantine doesn’t normally take those, even if he is otherwise a choice piece of beefcake. This is a risk she’s not totally lost at court, he comes as she’s putting in his spike, which means he’s not a deep beige. He turns Green, that is a hetero-sexual, cums when spanked, not while drinking pee or eating mistress’ shit, by the time School starts 2081 Aug 18. The school start date for a northerner like me is hellish early.
Looking at what’s hitting me and where I’ve spilled more ink than elsewhere is the moment or period of transmission from one life to another. I think this is why I am so very drawn to my Changes of Lives stories. There are several of them, Car Dunker & Suck-You-Bus’, County Racers’, Limp Dick’s and 1950Lion’s.
Limp Dick is the forth boy who gets hit with a rape charge, and is ‘salvaged’ by being made a sex slave of Trinity State. His story ends as he watches the three guys who threatened to kill him if he didn’t rape those two insensate girls endure their atonement.
I have five lives that are changing, most of them beyond recognition, and all of them with a degree of suddenness that is startling to those people.
All together your procedure is not nearly dramatic enough for the voluntary enslavement of individuals (though the action in the court room is).
Now in all my fiction my male slaves get 2 x 20 mg doses of generic Cealis, or even bootleg – from overseas or home made, a day. I have just checked out and the USDA has approved two drugs to do the same thing for pre-menopausal women, but from what the article says they’re not as reliable as Cealis is for guys.
By 2080 when my story is set there will be a reliable female cealis version, hopefully not deep injected like one of the current ones is. See: https://www.mayoclinic.org/healthy-lifestyle/sexual-health/expert-answers/viagra-for-women/faq-20057960
STORIES I’D LIKE TO SEE FROM YOU
1)\\tAllen Blake’s story from when he rapes Nikki to when he begins to change into something worth salvaging or whatever suitable end point you find. Note the ExWhyZed bank ;) sends him to the Big D market in Dallas, not HCI, because they’re not hopeful of ever getting their money back and he is slime.
Writing a criminal male slave’s processing will be good for you as a writer. The hard part will be his mentality, he will be seething at the injustice of it.
Yes he’s a narcissist, and it is destroying that aspect of him that his indenture becomes all about.
I believe he ends up at the same gay bdsm brothel that the aid Ms. Hollister went too.
I’m half tempted to have the gay guy spend a couple or six months with him. See Stories I’d like to see # 4 that I’ve redacted
2)\\tI wanted to follow a ‘stupid slave’ she resists being enslaved, doesn’t do slave yoga is modest on the sales floor, does everything wrong. To that end I thrashed around a fair bit. She has to be religious, very religious. I end up driving from my home to the beach thinking about her, that’s 13 hours.
She’s been born in a cult. At the age of 16 ¾ she helped a couple of cult members recover a diabetic boy who was taken from the cult by force of law. For this she , and gets dinged at for kidnapping.
A few words on her cult: It doesn’t believe in injections, especially vaccinations, nor does it allow tell tails, locator chips or other mechanical insertions into the body nor transfusions of blood, nor transplants of tissue, nor DNA testing, nor sex before marriage in their cult. They are seriously misogynist and she expects to have children starting at 18 and the only allowed birth control is lactation.
By the time her trial is over she’s 18, if only barely. Part of the delay is the trial(s) of the two adult cult members who have a lot more charges against them. The judge is feeling merciful, tells her to strip.
She says kill me quickly please. Substantial violence ensues. She rejoices in the pain.
The two other cult members are up on Murder 2 for killing one of the rescuers, arson for setting the fire, kidnapping, and other charges. The diabetic boy is pulled from the fire because he has two tracing chips in him, and the police have the addresses for both. He’s had his implanted tell tale and insulin pump ripped out of him, I make that as Assault Causing Bodily Harm. He was stuffed between the joists when the two cult members set the house on fire. They get 40 years to life in Huntsville.
The Girl gets sold to a brothel where she tells every customer they’re sinning, citing scriptural references and the way to life is through Jesus as personified in her cult. It takes her a year to realize she has an IUD in her. She takes it out. She’s about 6 weeks pregnant and about 2 years into her 20-year sentence when the Tyler Texas brothel owner decides he can’t beat that out of her and still have anything left. So he takers her back to Big D, where he got her and re sells her. I presume this is allowed.
The brothel owner doesn’t loose too much money on her, but she was a drag on business.
However much she was a drag on business the raid by cult members to ‘Liberate’ her is ugly, the brothel owner is at the gym, but there are 30 dead. That’s because the free girl at the desk hit “Star Spangled Banner” – the ‘Discreet Fire Alarm’ before she was shot. I’ll know when I write the scene weather that helps or hurts.
The raiders quite liked that as the slaughtered the occupants of the building that weren’t jumping out of windows. It was only two stories so not too far to the ground.
Her second sale is to a gay BDSM brothel in Amarillo or Abilene. A week later the brothel she was in, and had been identified by a cult member as being in, is raided so all the slave’s are ‘liberated’, which is to say taken to the cult’s compound to be re-programmed. The brothel owner survives because he wasn’t there, his manager is killed So are a third of the customers there. It sure makes the news.
It is my intention you should be lead writer on this part. I’ll deal with her changing which happens for her six years at the gay brothel. Her change starts when her cult is busted. The police find many bodies buried in the forecourt of the leaders home.
Her change comes about by her involvement with a deeply religious boi, who couldn’t pay his collage loans, was both a missionary for his church and a football player facilitates her change. He grades as select, and both ‘Missionary’ and ‘Football Player’ are tick boxes in Section Four of the auction house catalogue, so is Cheer Leader. He is profoundly confused about why he did what he did.
He pays off after four years, helped by the fact he gets the cult girl preggers. His parents ‘buy’ their grandchild. After he’s paid-off he has hassles using his connections so he is soon able to buy her out of the BDSM brothel. The issue is then he wants to marry her, but can’t until her 20 year sentence is done. This will let me use my contacts to see how that works in a different stressful situation.
3)\\tIt’s most or more than 10 years after Nikki, but Prof. Walker gets another Slave Psychology student. He, and I want you to write a major male character, hasn’t been a slave either. He and Nikki arrange with Ms. Pamela Williams and have him get in debt, enough to justify a one-year indenture, and Paul Susua.
In my view of this story their plans get a bump in that Ms. Williams sends him to that BDSM Brothel in Abilene or Amarillo by inviting its owner. His rapid repayment of his frequent large loans bothers the bank, in a good way.
Note during the trip by ‘poodle transport’ he’s got a water bottle to suck and his motorcyclist friend expects him to flow once an hour and if he goes too long he gets a shock telling him to suck water from the dildo in his cage. It’s real hot. Near Abilene he has to slather sun screen on his fellows as they work outside doing things around the acreage that the brothel occupies.
In Abilene he meets Allen Blake who has changed or is changing and the resistive girl and her boyfriend, who keeps ‘visiting’ her, and perhaps others. After six months he’s lent out to a road crew, and then sent to Mr. Sousa to finish up his year as a slave.
4)\\tYou introduce a John at my comment # 413 while she’s at Rent-A-Slut, I think it would be another good writing exercise for you to write this fellow up. In unified the text I’ve fully worked, and that I’ll email to you after you reply my message I’ve marked this section with #
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You’ve got two encounters ‘outside’ the club. And I’d love to understand what an associate member of the club is and does, as well as ‘several’ dominations of him at the club and his reactions and interactions at the club.
5)\\tNew character, guy who’s not too concerned about what he’s doing, driving slave kennels from here to there. Trouble is it’s August, it’s hot, and he doesn’t want to spend the money of the fuel for the refrigeration system. Some of the cargo dies of heat prostration, the rest are seriously degraded due to it.
In Learning Slave Psychology the truck needs a fan so there’s lots of air change, but the humidity isn’t so high since it’s inland. On the coast you need the refrigeration unit on. But in reality in Texas in September even from Austin to Dallas that’ll be piety much mandatory
6)\\tSomebody feeds a slave a peanut butter sandwich and they die. Yes, it is a suicide but did the person assist in that? Pick it up on the assumption that it was a ‘treat’ for a slave that had helped. They’d said they loved peanut-butter sandwiches.
7)\\tREDACTED PENDING SHARING AGREEMENT Shows up at Amarillo Gay BDSM Bordello
8)\\tI do whish you’d given us more about Judge Roy Bean V’s experience of being processed. Seeing into his mind will also be a powerful writing exercise.
9)\\tREDACTED PENDING SHARING AGREEMENT Shows up at Amarillo Gay BDSM Bordello
10)\\tIn the mists of writing. Slave girl at 6’4” and 600 pounds. Don’t know why she’s enslaved. Writing a slave male 5’9” 590 LB at start of story. NOT in this world.
DETAILED THANKS:
I have fallen in love with the word you introduced to me: Coffle. Yes I looked it up, Google is wonderful.
I have used it in chapter titles:
65)\\tCOFFLE DANCE I: SPANK BOTTOM & ZEN SWAT SUCKER’S
COFFLE DE DEUX\\t591
66)\\tCOFFLE DANCE II: THE CHAIN GANG’S COFFLE DE TOIS – ENTRÉE -
THE WORKER BEE DANCE PART 1\\t598
67)\\tCOFFLE DANCE II: THE CHAIN GANG’S COFFLE DE TOIS – ENTRÉE -
THE WORKER BEE DANCE PART 2\\t605
68)\\tCOFFLE DANCE II: THE CHAIN GANG’S COFFLE DE TOIS
FIRST VARIATION – THE GAY GORDON\\t613
69)\\tCOFFLE DANCE II: THE CHAIN GANG’S COFFLE DE TOIS
THIRD VARIATION – SLAVE BOI TWIRLING\\t619
70)\\tCOFFLE DANCE II: THE CHAIN GANG’S COFFLE DE TOIS
CONCLUSION – THREE SLAVE BOI TIGERS SO LITTLE
BLACK SAMBO TO BECOME GEE\\t626

Note that in KAOS Week all the participants are voluntary, Unlike yours, and all of their actions are legal, perhaps more than a little, because there are 756 days between the oldest and the youngest, and this all happened 18-years-ago. Legal maximum age differential for those under 18 is 762 days, and I do NOT recommend you push that at all, better leave it under 760.